I made the redraw of this picture http://eschergirls.tumblr.com/post/94928867835/the-deadly-dance-of-spine-bending-and-boob
First of all, look at their poses.
Look at their arms. They’re bended, it’s weak. Girls don’t want to strangle each other, they’re just touching each other.
Look at Batgirl’s legs. Well, the left leg can’t bend like that at all. The right leg is bent around alienlady’s leg… Well, maybe Batgirl is falling… but it still looks eeeeh.
So, overall, this pose looks like they’re dancing tango or something.
So, if you want to add tension, you can try to add more straight lines to your characters. It’s all about more cleaner lines of action.
What’s your character doing? Are they relaxing, or are they engaging in action? Relaxing action line will be more curvy.
at least that’s what I think
So, yeah, I tried to fix that. Tried to fix some of the anatomy too, even if I ended up with boob/butt pose, I hope it’s more or less natural spine curve.
I really like this redraw, and your analysis of the original. I also like what you said about keeping in mind what’s supposed to be happening, and “What’s your character doing?” because I think that’s often what’s missing in stuff on this blog. The storytelling is sacrificed because the focus is “how can we show her boob” or “how can we make this an ass shot” etc rather than “what’s supposed to be going on?” which is often supposed to be a dramatic or intimidating scene. Not necessarily as much for the original cover in this case, but for others, it can be pretty egregious.
Also that second picture makes me smile. They look so cute together. :3